1. Here's the problem. We're losing in the state championship.
2. We're losing by 6.
3. It's the State Championship.
4. First String TE is hurt, second string is getting tired.
5. Coach puts me in and I win the game for us.
Problem-Solution Essay
1:00 left on the clock. Were losing by six and Kyle (our first string TE) is injured. Jordan (our second string TE) is getting really tired and probably can't last to the end of the game. "Jared, your going in for Kyle!" Coached yelled to me. I am about to faint I'm so excited. I can't believe that he's going to put me in! "Coming!" I screech back. I high-five Kyle on my way out to the field. He looks like he might barf he's so tired. Just as i get to the huddle, the QB says the play. (What play?) We're losing in the state championship.
I get into my position and forget what number the play is on just as the QB yells the first 'Hut!' If I don't remember what it's on soon, I'm going to get killed and coach might pull me out. "Hut!" The ball snaps and I go a little late but not too late that I won't get killed but I might mess up. The QB tosses the ball to the running back and he gains about three yards. 45 seconds left on the clock. This is the only game my dad will be able to watch because he's only home from the war for a week, and we're going to lose.
The other team calls a time-out. We go to our coach. "Brady, we're running a Hail Mary. Jared do you think you can handle this?" Asks coach. "Yeah, I think so." I respond. "Alright! Now we're going to try and see if they'll jump offsides. We're going on three!" He says. The buzzer goes off and we're called out to the field by the refs. We all get into our positions and we get ready for the play. "Ready! Set! Hut!" One of the players on the other team jumped! We advanced 5 yards. First and Ten.
"Same play!" yelled coach from the sidelines. We lined up in our positions again and got ready for the play. "Ready! Set! Hut!" this time no one jumped. "Hut!Hut!" I Ran as fast as I could down the sideline. Just as I turned around I saw the QB throw the ball. 10..9..8..7..6.. The ball was getting closer to me now. 5..4..3.. I saw the ball into my hands, the ball started bobbling around in my arms. 2..1..BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP! The other teams crowd cheered like crazy. Then I crossed into the endzone and they went silent. Our crowd went crazy! I won the state championship for us 38 to 37. I won with 10 seconds left, and my Dad was watching.
Great Story, but it isn't exactly a problem with solutions; it's more of a plot with conflicts and resolution.
Could you rewrite this the coach's point of view? His team's best players are out, and the team is losing the state championship. What are his possible solutions? One possibility is putting in a second stringer. What could be another option? If you write it from the coach's view, it could be problem-solution essay.
Outline For Essay
1. Here's the problem. We're losing in the state championship.
2. We're losing by 6.
3. It's the State Championship.
4. First String TE is hurt, second string is getting tired.
5. Coach puts me in and I win the game for us.
Problem-Solution Essay
1:00 left on the clock. Were losing by six and Kyle (our first string TE) is injured. Jordan (our second string TE) is getting really tired and probably can't last to the end of the game. "Jared, your going in for Kyle!" Coached yelled to me. I am about to faint I'm so excited. I can't believe that he's going to put me in! "Coming!" I screech back. I high-five Kyle on my way out to the field. He looks like he might barf he's so tired. Just as i get to the huddle, the QB says the play. (What play?) We're losing in the state championship.
I get into my position and forget what number the play is on just as the QB yells the first 'Hut!' If I don't remember what it's on soon, I'm going to get killed and coach might pull me out. "Hut!" The ball snaps and I go a little late but not too late that I won't get killed but I might mess up. The QB tosses the ball to the running back and he gains about three yards. 45 seconds left on the clock. This is the only game my dad will be able to watch because he's only home from the war for a week, and we're going to lose.
The other team calls a time-out. We go to our coach. "Brady, we're running a Hail Mary. Jared do you think you can handle this?" Asks coach. "Yeah, I think so." I respond. "Alright! Now we're going to try and see if they'll jump offsides. We're going on three!" He says. The buzzer goes off and we're called out to the field by the refs. We all get into our positions and we get ready for the play. "Ready! Set! Hut!" One of the players on the other team jumped! We advanced 5 yards. First and Ten.
"Same play!" yelled coach from the sidelines. We lined up in our positions again and got ready for the play. "Ready! Set! Hut!" this time no one jumped. "Hut!Hut!" I Ran as fast as I could down the sideline. Just as I turned around I saw the QB throw the ball. 10..9..8..7..6.. The ball was getting closer to me now. 5..4..3.. I saw the ball into my hands, the ball started bobbling around in my arms. 2..1..BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP! The other teams crowd cheered like crazy. Then I crossed into the endzone and they went silent. Our crowd went crazy! I won the state championship for us 38 to 37. I won with 10 seconds left, and my Dad was watching.
Great Story, but it isn't exactly a problem with solutions; it's more of a plot with conflicts and resolution.
Could you rewrite this the coach's point of view? His team's best players are out, and the team is losing the state championship. What are his possible solutions? One possibility is putting in a second stringer. What could be another option? If you write it from the coach's view, it could be problem-solution essay.